2007-08-14 Jenna Rose: I really like this! Nice use of the 5 words. In the first line though, I think "deepest black of midnight" would sound better; "deepest blackness" is a mouthful. But that's just my opinion. Good job! 2007-08-17 pirate witch: I very much aggree with Willow Rose there. Wonderfully written, althoughg "deepest black" would certainly sound cleaner. 2007-08-23 Mordred: Hmm. You're right, both of you. Thank you very much for the input! It's much appreciated. 2007-08-26 Morningstar Rising: Nicely done, I like very much. 2007-08-26 Mordred: Thank you very much. I'm glad you enjoyed it. 2007-08-27 Morningstar Rising: welcome.[Mordred]: 676.Contest Entries.Five Words Contest.August 07
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In the deepest black of midnight, strains of a tune long forgotten wafted through the chill September air. It was a song for the ears of children; for those little ones too innocent to know the frustration of the world. The young ones, roused from their beds by the music, scurried down the streets and out of the cities, to the place where the mushrooms grew tall as grown-ups and sleep did not exist. All around them were gossamer-winge